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Sharon Hom's avatar

Love the repetition and echoes expanding the resonances of each line.

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Shondra Bowie's avatar

Thank you. Sharon 🧡

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Simply, yet so effective in expressing the emotion of that moment, thank you, Shondra!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Simple, yet so effective in expressing the emotion of that moment, thank you, Shondra!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Simple, yet so effective in expressing the emotion of that moment, thank you, Shondra!

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Shondra Bowie's avatar

Thank you, Paul!

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Lani V. Cox's avatar

Sometimes I like to read poems backwards, and yours works. Lovely poem, Shondra. 💞

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Shondra Bowie's avatar

Ah that’s lovely, Lani!

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

So lovely and sad.

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Shondra Bowie's avatar

Thanks, Margaret Ann ❤️

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LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

I love this. So simple and spare. Looking forward to hearing you read on Saturday!

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Shondra Bowie's avatar

Thanks LeeAnn. I’m looking forward to it too x

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Tara Connor's avatar

I really love this one. And it's such an accomplishment to write a short poem! I have such a hard time keeping my poetry brief, but I also seem to be happiest with my work when I do. My daughter writes beautiful tiny poems and I find it so inspiring. Thanks for sharing this one. It has everything it needs and nothing it doesn't. 💕

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Shondra Bowie's avatar

Thank you, Tara. I love the challenge of creating small pieces with impact. I sometimes think I keep my poems too short. Now I accept they tell me when they’re done.

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